I'll make some time to edit this

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1_AcpMYo4VgZk7jt4Jka9yJo_dUA7dtx9?usp=sharing

page 2:
maybe: "two brothers and I" -> "two brothers and me". I'm not really sure myself.
suggestion: "get in to" -> "get into"
suggestion: "university that mom"

page 9:
ERROR: last two bubbles have duplicate text.

page 10:
suggestion: "depression " -> "depression, " Oxford comma!

>>5815

I kept "two brothers and I". If I were to change to "me", then I would put it first: "me and my two brothers". Depends how casual it's supposed to be.

> ERROR: last two bubbles have duplicate text.

Good catch. Text was wrong too...

>>5816

page 8:
minor suggestion: "fuck up" -> "fuckup" or "fuck-up". Not really sure myself.

page 10:
minor suggestion: "as is" -> "as they are", agreeing better with "things"

>>5817

Fixed. I chose the hyphen one. I'm not sure either.