>>5222 Here's to address all your concerns from >>5000
>Itadakimasu
Let's go with my translation then. "Let's dig in." "Let's eat."
>S006
> <46AD> 「エリスã¯ã‚¹ã‚¤ãƒ¬ãƒ³ã®åå‰ã®ç”±æ¥ã€çŸ¥ã£ã¦ã„ã¾ã™ã‹ï¼Ÿã€=「Did you know that the water lily takes its name from Eris?ã€
> <489F> 「由æ¥â€¦â€¦ï¼Ÿã€=「Origin...?ã€
> <492B> 「ãƒã‚¹ã«ä¼¼ãŸèŠ±ãŒå¤•æ–¹ã«é–‰ã˜ã‚‹ã‹ã‚‰ã€Žç¡ã‚‹è“®ã€ã¤ã¾ã‚Šã€ç¡è“®ã¨ã„ã†æ„味ã«ãªã‚‹ã‚“ã§ã™ã€=「A flower resembling the lotus, which closes in the evening. So it is known as the "Sleeping Lotus". That’s what the water lily means.ã€
> <49F7> 「ãã†ãªã®ï¼Ÿã€€çŸ¥ã‚‰ãªã‹ã£ãŸã‚ã€=「Is that so? I didn’t know that.ã€
"Did you know where the water lily got its name from, Eris?"
"Its origin...?" //
"There's a flower that resembled a lotus. Its petals closes during the evening, it was known as the "Sleeping Lotus." That's where the name 'Water Lily' came from.
This is a bit complicated because it's a Japanese naming thing. Suiren (スイレン/ç¡è“®) is named after the ç¡ã‚‹(nemuru)è“®(hasu). Where ç¡ can also be read as "Sui" and è“® also being read as "Ren" Which gives the flower its name "Suiren" (water lily).
I'd pretty much prefer to translate it this way.
"Did you know where 'Suiren' (water lily) got its name from, Eris?"
"There's a flower that resembled a lotus. Its petals closes during the evening, it was known as the Sleeping (Sui) Lotus (Ren). That's where the name 'Suiren' (water lily) came from."
It's wordy, and long, but it translates to what the text wanted to say. if you do have other suggestions, do tell.
>S009
> <7479> ãã—ã¦ã€æ”¾èª²å¾Œã«ãªã£ã¦ã€‚=And like that, it was now after school.
"Just like that, the classes ended for the day." This is really difficult to reword. That's exactly how it is best to translate already. Although "And so, after school came." works as well. Anything, really.
> <9592> 「ãã‚Œã¯ã€ãŠã¯ã˜ãã§ã™ã€‚å¼¾ã„ã¦éŠã¶ã®ã§ã™ãŒâ€¦â€¦ã‚„ã£ã¦ã¿ã¾ã™ã‹ï¼Ÿã€=「Those are marbles. You play with it like this... Do you want to try?ã€
> #actually flat discs, not spheres
> #http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tiddlywinks I saw this, I think we should use this translation, but I haven't changed it yet. If I were to suggest, marbles should be changed to 'Winks' like what the wikipedia said. -hinata-
>Inclined to agree, whilst I wouldn't know what 'winks' were I could still look it up whereas having marbles, from Shizuku's narrated description of them playing, leaves the scene seeming rather unrealistic.
They're technically "flat marbles" in English. Let's use 'flat marbles' then.
>S010
> <1CCC> 「エリスã€ã©ã†ã—ã¦ã„ããªã‚Šï¼Ÿã€=「Eris, why did you come here?ã€
> <1D5E> ã•ã™ãŒã«é©šãã¾ã—ãŸã€‚=It was indeed a surprise.
> <1DE6> 今夜ã€ã‚¨ãƒªã‚¹ã‚’招待ã—よã†ã¨æ€ã£ã¦ã„ãŸã®ã«ã€ã„ããªã‚Šå½¼å¥³ã®æ–¹ã‹ã‚‰è¨ªãã¦æ¥ãŸã®ã§ã™ã‹ã‚‰ã€‚=Although I was going to invite her tonight, she came here so suddenly.
> <1FFA> 「エリスã€æ€¥ã«ã©ã†ã—ãŸã®ã§ã™ã‹ï¼Ÿã€=「Eris, why are you here so suddenly?ã€
> <209A> 「ウンã€ãã‡ã‚·ã‚ºã‚¯â€¦â€¦ãƒ‡ãƒ¼ãƒˆã—よã†â˜…ã€=「Yes, hey, Shizuku… Let's go on a date. ★ã€
I'd keep the current translations because it makes sense. Shizuku said "Eris, Why are you here?" and corrected herself later to "Eris, why are you here so suddenly?" because of her surprise. She speaks in formal Japanese, her first question was quite informal, she corrected herself. This is correct. Although for the last one, I'd say
"Mm. Hey, Shizuku... let's go on a date. ★"
>S011
> <6023> ãšã£ã¨ä¸‹ã‚’å‘ã„ã¦ã€ãƒ—ルプル震ãˆã¦ã„ã‚‹ã®ã§ã™ã€‚=Her face was done for a while and she began to tremble.
"She's been looking at the ground for a while, and then she began to tremble." It's literally "She's been facing downwards for a while and then she began trembling all of a sudden." It was a typo, I guess.
>S012
> <A303> 「ã¡ã‚…ã‚‹ã€ã‚Œã‚……んãµã£â˜… æ¢ã‚ã¡ã‚ƒã‚¤ãƒ¤ã€ã§ã—ょã†ï¼Ÿã€€ã‚·ã‚ºã‚¯â˜…ã€=「Churu, rero… nfu★ Do you want me to stop? Shizuku ★ã€
> <A6CA> 「ã¡ã‚…ã‚‹ã€ã‚“ã¡ã‚………ã‚ãã€ã‚·ã‚ºã‚¯ã®å¥¥ã‹ã‚‰â€¦â€¦ãƒŸãƒ«ã‚¯ã¿ãŸã„ã«çœŸã£ç™½ãªã®ã€å‡ºã¦ããŸâ˜… ã˜ã‚…ã‚‹ã€å…¨éƒ¨èˆã‚ã¦ã‚ã’る★ã€=「Churu, nchuu… Ah, Inside Shizuku… A pure white milk came out. ★ Juru, I'll lick everything. ★ã€
"schlurp lick... mmph★ You don't want me to stop, right, Shizuku?★"
"slurp kiss... Ah... A pure white milk came out... from inside you.★ slurp I'll lick everything. ★"
>S014
> <4620> 「ã¯ã„。冷ãŸã„ãŠèŒ¶ã¨ã€æ°´è“å入りã®ããšå¯„ã›ã‚’用æ„ã—ã¦ã‚ã‚Šã¾ã™ã‚ˆã€=「Yes. I made some chilled green tea and kudzu jelly with fruit pieces in it.ã€
> #DeltaCake: kudzu is called Japanese arrowroot in English if preferred
> Again, I don't particularly care either way so ?
Just retain "kudzu" since it's the name of a Japanese plant.