Page 13
felt about me. =>
thought of me.

Page 18
You're kinda frightening and creeping me out. =>
You're kinda frightening me.

Page 26
out of us. =>
out of me.

>>4511
That was me.

Page 10
I see... so Homura says "Madoka" sometimes? ->
I see... so Homura still mentions "Madoka" sometimes, huh?

Right now, in the go-around ->
So now, in this go-around
(Just to avoid having the word "right" two times in a row.)

Page 17
Geez, what wrong? ->
Geez, what's wrong?
(I assume the fx in the panel before that are "struggle" or something. A note might make it more clear why she's asking what's wrong.)

is it always like that...
basically...? ->
is it basically always...
like that...?

Page 10 and 30
I don't know Japanese, so I can't help with this, or tell if it's actually wrong.
But on page 10 Sayaka uses "among others" to refer to people who were able to come back to life, and on page 30 when Kyouko asks what she meant by "among others" she uses it to refer to people who got a new weapon.

>>4514

>and on page 30 when Kyouko asks what she meant by "among others" she uses it to refer to people who got a new weapon.

No, here I think she refers to Madoka who got back as a gun. But I didn't get the alive guns thing. It might be the author's own spin on what things would be like after the universe reformed.

>>4515

>No, here I think she refers to Madoka who got back as a gun.

I don't know much about Madoka but doesn't Sayaka only refer to Homura as "the transfer student"? And I don't think guns get mentioned anywhere at all, do they?

>It might be the author's own spin on what things would be like after the universe reformed.

That would make sense. Thanks for the clarification.

>>4516

>I don't know much about Madoka but doesn't Sayaka only refer to Homura as "the transfer student"?

Yeah, and she does. Madoka is "the transfer student's gun":
あー…うん、転校生も武器変わってたっしょ？
"Ah, yep. The transfer student has a different weapon, too, right?"

>And I don't think guns get mentioned anywhere at all, do they?

Yeah, on page 10:
それにしても…武器としてって…神様ならちゃんと元通り生き返らせろよなー…
"As a God she could have restored the guns back (alive) to normal." I don't know much about Madoka either, but I'm pretty sure that's something original, so I just put it as:
"I'm glad about that, but... she could've at least restored the weapons to how they were before."

I have nothing really to add except the back cover's not leveled. Which I just went a head and did.

And on page 12 "and upon his recovery" is a little cramped height wise. I would just reduce the leading a bit.

>>4517
Oh, I see. It's implying Madoka is her new weapon.
>>4518

>page 12

and upon his recovery ->
and as soon as he got better
(Sounds less formal, and more like what Kyouko would say.)

Sorry for the nitpicking. I usually just lurk here.

>>4514

>is it basically always...

Vetoing that one because it's a shaping nightmare. The original line is fine, especially considering how confused she is.

>>4518
I just had the backup layer active, that's all. I've also moved the back cover to the end of the book because it's kinda out of place where it was. Page numbers are adjusted accordingly.

>>4521

>I just had the backup layer active

Ah, okay.
It came out good. Thanks again, by the way.