Good job :D
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"Phew..." can be moved up a bit.
"...GH!!" can be moved up.
"No..." move down.
"Wai-.." can be moved down a little bit.
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"Mm..." (the one before the "I can't...") can be moved down a bit.
Page 123:
"...goodness, you idiot." can be moved up a bit.
"Art club president?" can be moved a little bit up, and a px or three to the left.
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"Yet there's people..." can be moved little bit down.
"The roof is the complete..." can be moved a px or two to the right.
"The room that was" can be moved a bit down.
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"Sigh..." can be moved a little bit to the left, and down.
"It's Shiina one-sided love." -> "It's Shiina[S] one-sided love."
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"After Satsuki's..." can be moved a bit down, and a px or two to the left.
"I have a hot date..." can be moved down, and a little left.
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"Eeeh?!" can be moved to the left.
Try to make room for "No way!" to be moved a little to the left, and a little down.
"But[Enter]..." -> remove the linebreak.
"Because," can be moved down.
"She did it." can be moved down quite a bit.
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"If only my love had..." can be moved a little bit down.
Page 132:
"If it were possible," -> "If it [was] possible,"
"But that this thread of fate..." can be moved downwards, and a few px to the left.
"With your heart." -> "With[Enter]your[Enter]heart.", make a bit bigger.
Credits page:
"...really like girlswith short hair!" missing a space.
Awesome work with the edit ^^